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DianaWehbe
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 01, 2008 11:07 pm    Post subject: ok NEW commercial critique =) Reply with quote

thanks for everyones help with getting the url right Smile
http://media.putfile.com/commercial-demo-49
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 5:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Diana, you have a great sound! I love the energy.

Demos should show variety, and in the neighborhood of 7-10 seconds of 6 or 7 spots. You have 3 complete spots, all at the same high energy level. Cutting those down in length and alternating them with some quieter pieces would give you a better showcase.

That said - despite the "unconventionalness" of your demo, I really enjoyed listening to it Smile
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 7:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Diana,

What Mary said is right on the money. What you have isn't so much a demo as 3 samples of your high energy work. You do that very well and if that's all you want to promote, then cut down the 3 spots so you have one 60 second demo with excerpts from each. Maybe use the beginning from one, middle from the second and the end of the third?
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 2:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

u guys are great! thank u for ur advice Smile
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 2:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I do like the tone of your voice...unique, if you ask me.

That said, I dunno why, but to me, the whole thing sounds like an on-air personality reading spots during a commercial break. Maybe it's the music chosen or effects used or ?? I'm not sure why.

Also, I talk fast and I often am told by my director / producer / engineer to slow the hell down, so I think you might want to have some stuff on there with a more leisurely pace.

And, as has been said, more variety...these are all sorta yelled (which might be why my first impression was what it was)...definitely mix it up.
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 3:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

haha ur right on the money my friend. i am a radio persoanlity lol thats where it comes from! Smile
and yes i will def get some toned down commercials Smile
thanks!
and thank you for the compliment Smile
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