VO-BB - 20 YEARS OLD!

Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 7:44 am Post subject: Bios. Help?

Hi

I'm getting ready to launch my new site, and I'm struggling with the bio. I would love opinions.

Here's my old one

Whitney is a voice actor with a true to life style and a natural sense of expression. Her voice is full of color, and her perk knob? It goes to 11, but is fully adjustable.

Whitney studied acting at Miami University in Oxford OH, where she graduated with a BFA in theatre performance. She works primarily from her fully equipped home studio, but loves going to local studios too. Seriously, fresh air!! Real people you can shake hands with and give a smile!! What's not to love, right?

Clients describe Whitney as versatile and energetic (they often wonder what she had for breakfast, and if they can please have some), very creative, and full of new ideas.

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Here's the new one that I tweaked from my ad agency friend

Whitney has a colorful, fresh range that will bring genuine excitement and style to your ears, and your project.

A trained theatre actor with a strong focus on creative improvisation, she comes to the mic ready to deliver the sound you want, or discover the sound you've been dreaming up in your head. Need a jingle singer? She's a one woman choir of a thousand voices.

Listen for yourself. Share her demos. Or better yet, contact her for your next project and you'll know: Whitney is just as much fun to work with as she is to listen to.

What do you think?

heyguido · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 8:03 am Post subject:

The second one reads like ad copy.

The original sounds like you.

Just sayin'.... Inoccent

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Fran McClellan · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 9:19 am Post subject:

I like both, but I agree with Don...the first one sounds more you.

On a side note, I know the standard these days is to have bios in third person, but I'd like to see more of them written in first person. Like you are telling me about yourself instead of someone telling me about you...ya know?
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Scott Pollak · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 10:25 am Post subject:

+1 to Don's comments.
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Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 12:46 pm Post subject:

I really appreciate you all offering up your opinions, thanks.
I think I'll stick with the original, I agree.

Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 12:52 pm Post subject:

Also, suggested to me as a tag line - "The voice that shines"

? I feel meh about it.

Scott Pollak · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 12:54 pm Post subject:

Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 1:05 pm Post subject:

Aw, thanks Scott.

Yeah. Meh. Blech.

Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 1:22 pm Post subject:

Hmm....

So now I'm thinking maybe Natural Born Voiceover, or naturally grown voiceover. My site has a bit of a flower theme so maybe the second? Maybe nothing?

DougVox · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 1:46 pm Post subject:

What Don said.

Also:

Organic Voiceover?

Voiceover that's purely organic?

Free Range Voiceover?

The Gluten Free Voice?

Non-GMO Voiceover?

Wink

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Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 2:04 pm Post subject:

lol Doug.
I totally thought the Non-Gmo one. Heh.

heyguido · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 2:08 pm Post subject:

Free Range Voiceover.... Don't be chicken.... Give her a try! Laugh

Seriously.... Nuthin'. Don't try to be cute.... Just you.
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Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 2:11 pm Post subject:

Free Range Voiceover - Set your project FREE!!!

Completely unrelated to this, my husband and I came up with the idea of a riding vacuum cleaner. I came up with the tagline "when your first world problems are REALLY a problem."

heyguido · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 2:24 pm Post subject:

Here ya go....

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Whit · Posted: Thu Jun 27, 2013 2:29 pm Post subject:

I've always loved a good kitty dressed like a shark.