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annesayre · Joined: 03 Mar 2020 Posts: 5 Location: 60640

Wondering if I can trouble some lovely people here for feedback on my narration demo. Performance, material, tech... Lay it on me, por favor.

https://on.soundcloud.com/qVEvp

Thanks in advance!

Bruce · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2022 7:16 am Post subject:

Hi Anne,

Your delivery was pleasant, but at the same time your delivery was almost exactly the same with every selection. A narration demo should show variety. A little drama, a little compassion, a bit of discovery, making the complex understandable, are just a few ideas. Variety is the spice of life and a successful voiceover career. Try again please.

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todd ellis · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2022 7:24 am Post subject:

brutally honest?

pleasant, but boring. like bruce said, add some energy & variety, you'll get there.
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Bob Bergen · Flight Attendant Joined: 22 Apr 2008 Posts: 887

Hey Anne! It's OK. But to my ears it's a tad one note. It kinda sounds home made. It might not be, but that's what I hear. Even the production sounds a bit one note and from the same library.

Also, where would you market this? Now, I'm no expert at e-learning but this sounds more like an e-learning demo than a narration demo. Before I clicked the link to hear it I was expecting to hear more documentary/reality narration, such as National Geographic, HGTV, etc. This may not be your intended usage for the demo or even for your career. And I might be too conditioned to the national vo market, but this is the kind of narration work I think of when I see narration demo.

Your reads are not bad. But I would love to hear more flavor and variety in the content and reads.

Philip Banks · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2022 8:05 am Post subject:

I'm not a coach but may be a conversation with me via skype will help, happy to do that if you like. No cost.

Skype id is voiceoverist

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annesayre · Joined: 03 Mar 2020 Posts: 5 Location: 60640

Thanks all very much for your kindly worded insights; this is exactly what I was seeking. It's also another reason why this forum is so great!

Philip, I am definitely going to take you up on that! Much appreciated.