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		sandyg Guest
 
 
 
 
 
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				 Posted: Tue Aug 21, 2007 3:27 pm    Post subject: Seeking Honest Words.......Again | 
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				Previously, I posted my Commercial Demo Reel and received good feedback from this VO-BB community, although, not always in a positive vein. Nonetheless, I've accepted each critique as a plus. One must often learn from others since others often see/hear what we cannot.
 
 
I've herein provided my new Narration Demo Reel for appraisal. 
 
You'll find it at: http://www.vo-bb.com/demos/SandyGreenbergNarr.mp3
 
 
Thanks to those who care to respond.
 
 
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		Chuck Davis M&M
  
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				 Posted: Wed Aug 22, 2007 6:10 am    Post subject:  | 
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				Hi Sandy,
 
 
I liked it.  Some nit-picky observations.  I heard a little distortion in the next to last cut...possibly mp3 related?  Music levels on most cuts could be a tad hotter,  Otherwise...the piece as a whole sounds pretty solid to me.
 
 
Chuck D _________________ Wicked huge.....in India.
 
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		audio'connell T-Shirt
  
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				 Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 12:48 pm    Post subject:  | 
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				Sandy:
 
 
I'm trying to put my finger on what I find awkward about this demo.
 
 
And awkward does not always equal bad.
 
 
I think it’s the pacing of the read.
 
 
"...Brian Miller, has stopped..." the comma in the script seemed sounded to me like youhit the brakes or edited out a breath for too long a time (and I know it’s a millisecond too long but I "felt" the pause and I shouldn't)
 
 
On applied water management, "welcome to applied water management..." doesn't have the smile required by the copy. It doesn't have to sound pukey but I should hear more smile. "...to our community <comma or breath here, not sure which> is essential.." again, awkward.
 
 
I think these small but to me very noticeable "misses" are also very fixable.
 
 
I hope this makes sense and if you'd like to call me about it I'd be glad to chat with you on it.
 
 
I hope this helps. _________________ - Peter
 
audioconnell Voice Over Talent 
 
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