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[Brett Mason]

Now...THAT...is indeed creative! Kudos.

Just a suggestion, though. Your name doesn't stand out as much as it could. What about headlining the board with something like "Greg Phelps' Place" where you currently have "Today's Special", you know, like it's your bistro or whatever. You could still have "Today's Special" below that. And, while I like the "Blue Plate" reinforcing the theme, the more I think about it I don't know what it adds beyond that...I mean it's not well defined as to what the blue plate is. Perhaps you could exchange the "blue plate" for the "tonight", and then add some additional menu items, whatever they may be...because "tonight" adds a dated element that might mislead. Also, the phone number, while very nicely done, is a little small and angled over to the side. You've got all that negative space, why not make the number a little more prominent.

Okay, I'm nodding out on my keyboard...goodnight, moon..........
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[JBarrett]

Definite improvement! Here's what jumps out at me at first glance...

• The whole text section on the right would probably work better if it were higher. I presume you're going to add custom text below "Greg Phelps Voiceovers", but right now you don't have much room. That leads into the next bit...
  
• There's something that feels odd about the placement of the "Call Greg" piece. My gut tells me it would feel better in the lower-left corner of the larger pane, which would help to leave the space below "Greg Phelps Voiceovers" a bit cleaner.
  
• You should probably play with the kerning on "Call Greg". There's almost no space between the L's in "Call," and it looks like "Cal".
  
• The saturation of the GP logo is still a bit strong. The size and weight of the logo help it to stand out sufficiently IMO, so the strong color is unnecessary, and kinda detracts from the less saturated chalk theme you've got going on the rest of the layout.

Them's me thoughts. Overall, it looks really fun!
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[Bailey]

Let me make a small observation. It deals mostly with the Diner Menu presentation.

Could it look more authentic with the appearance likened to a diner menu that you see on the wall?... black felt background with the "white" plastic lettering.

Or possibly a "red checkered" tablecloth background, with a "dinner menu" and a "dessert menu" lying on the table (as if a server had just set them down). Each menu could contain the same information you had previously listed.
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[JBarrett]

The alternatives you mention are certainly interesting, Bailey, but it feels equally authentic in its current style. Have you not been to a place that has used chalkboards for their menus?
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[davidmonteath]

Good looking site, but I found my eye constantly drawn to the bright purple logo bottom right.

Maybe its just me, but I didn't want to look to the left, I was just too aware of the logo.

David

Just seen Justin's comments above, he put it better.
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[todd ellis]

by jingo ... i like it.

i really like the way you've positioned it for dynamic information to appear (or not) in the open area.
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[Gp]

thanks everyone for the comments and input. I really appreciate your help.