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pd0025 · Joined: 27 Oct 2018 Posts: 2

Greetings,
I am seeking some constructive criticism and advice regarding my demo. Please take a listen and let me know your honest thoughts and advice. Thanks in advance--Phill

https://soundcloud.com/pd0025/phillip-dixon-commercial-demo

Philip Banks · Posted: Wed Oct 31, 2018 3:04 am Post subject:

Your heading is only about 1 degree off so if you want to make a change you don't have to do very much at all to make a huge difference. Listen to the points where you lift or emphasise words and that's where you'll find the 1 degree. A raised eyebrow, a soft smile or a tilt of the head is enough. In doing that you allow your listener to think for themselves as opposed to tell them what to think.

Should you really be concerned about what you are able to do? No, you're fine.

Bruce · Posted: Wed Oct 31, 2018 6:25 am Post subject:

I’d keep working on making the readings yours personally and less of reading the script. Take heart. You’re much better at it than a lot of newcomers. I encourage you to cut back and eventually eliminate the sibilance. It distracts and detracts.

Carry on!

B
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Tre M. · Posted: Wed Oct 31, 2018 7:36 am Post subject:

Gimme more of YOU, dont read it just to READ it. Own the script, and give some personality.
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Lance Blair · M&M Joined: 03 Jun 2007 Posts: 2281 Location: Atlanta

Wow, you've got this.

Just find a way to close up the pauses. One big pause per clip is okay, but find a way to make the thoughts sound distinct but not distant from each other, like in regular speech.

Then you're pretty much there. Smile

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Philip Banks · Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2018 2:28 pm Post subject:

We haven't done the bit about the order of the clips yet so bear with us as that takes ages.

pd0025 · Joined: 27 Oct 2018 Posts: 2

Greetings,
Just want to thank you all for taking the time to help me out, I really appreciate your thoughts, comments and advice. Thank you so much and I look forward to being able to draw upon your experience and wisdom again if you all don't mind. Thanks again!!!!

Phill