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Philip Banks Je Ne Sais Quoi
Joined: 20 Jun 2005 Posts: 11049 Location: Portgordon, Scotland
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2018 11:27 am Post subject: Could not say today ..... |
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"Philip, it sounds a little robotic". The writer, unlike me, did not have the lung capacity of a Blue Whale but tried to give a more fluid example of how a 79 word, 142 syllable sentence SHOULD sound. T&Ps for his family and friends. First death by exhalation ever recorded. |
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Bruce Boardmeister
Joined: 06 Jun 2005 Posts: 7928 Location: Portland, OR
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2018 12:43 pm Post subject: |
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It always amazes me how many writers don’t realize how inexpensive punctuation can be, especially when purchased in bulk and used liberally.
B _________________ VO-BB Member #31 Enlisted June, 2005
I'm not a Zoo, but over the years I've played one on radio/TV. . |
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Mike Harrison M&M
Joined: 03 Nov 2007 Posts: 2029 Location: Equidistant from New York City and Philadelphia, along the NJ Shore
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I wish more writers (commercial or narration) would read their work out loud before submitting it. _________________ Mike
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I have taken leave of my sensors.
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todd ellis A Zillion
Joined: 02 Jan 2007 Posts: 10494 Location: little egypt
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2018 2:02 pm Post subject: |
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could you make it sound more conversational, yet 3x the speed? _________________ "i know philip banks": todd ellis
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Eddie Eagle M&M
Joined: 23 Apr 2008 Posts: 2393
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2018 3:16 pm Post subject: |
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Writer's thought: "It sounded good in my head." |
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dwpthe3rd Contributore Level V
Joined: 28 Feb 2010 Posts: 198 Location: Where palm trees meet pines
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Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2018 7:29 pm Post subject: |
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Eddie Eagle wrote: | Writer's thought: "It sounded good in my head." |
... And your head is where........? _________________ If attacked by a mob of clowns go for the juggler.
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Lizden A Zillion
Joined: 04 Dec 2006 Posts: 8856 Location: The dark recesses of my mind
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Dave owes me a hew keyboard! _________________ Liz de Nesnera O.A.V. ~ Livin' The VO Dream!
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Eddie Eagle M&M
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Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2018 7:30 am Post subject: |
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