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allensco
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 6:06 pm    Post subject: Updated demos Reply with quote

Hello all! In my continuing effort to improve, I have updated my demos with more recent material. I respectfully solicit your comments. Laugh

Commercial Demo
Narration Demo
Telephone Demo

Thanks for taking the time to listen.
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Hart
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 8:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Allen,

I've listened to so much of your stuff it's hard for me to be impartial, but here goes. I'll stick to your commercial demo.

The length is good, quality is nice. I can tell you're lovin the Lawson mic.

I would move the lead off spot. It's a cool effect, and I use something similar in a lot of my imaging but it's probably not the sound that's going to get you hired most of the time. Keep it but move it later in the demo.

Either recut or drop the ABC Mortgage spot. Your vocal quality is nice but your speech pattern feels off to me. I feel like you should be having a conversation with me, but your read is a bit stilted. Maybe move the security system spot up. It's warmer.

Overall not bad, but I would revise revise revise. I read something recently about how many times Dr. Seuss revised The Cat In The Hat. That's good advice for us VO types I think. Keep revising until you get it down to that golden nugget of pure Allen.
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allensco
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 9:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hart wrote:
Allen,

I've listened to so much of your stuff it's hard for me to be impartial, but here goes. I'll stick to your commercial demo.

The length is good, quality is nice. I can tell you're lovin the Lawson mic.

I would move the lead off spot. It's a cool effect, and I use something similar in a lot of my imaging but it's probably not the sound that's going to get you hired most of the time. Keep it but move it later in the demo.

Either recut or drop the ABC Mortgage spot. Your vocal quality is nice but your speech pattern feels off to me. I feel like you should be having a conversation with me, but your read is a bit stilted. Maybe move the security system spot up. It's warmer.

Overall not bad, but I would revise revise revise. I read something recently about how many times Dr. Seuss revised The Cat In The Hat. That's good advice for us VO types I think. Keep revising until you get it down to that golden nugget of pure Allen.


Thanks for taking time to listen! I'll go over them and make changes per your comments Laugh
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