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Rick Riley

Ok, I'm not a big fan of people putting up demos for critique, and I don't want to be a burden, but at this point I am one of them. HOWEVER, I don't want a critique, I just would appreciate your opinion.

This is the Commercial Demo I've been using for some time. https://soundcloud.com/rickriley-1/commercialdemo-rriley

This is THE EXACT SAME DEMO with a different open. https://soundcloud.com/rickriley-1/commercial_demo_2-rriley

If you would just listen to the opening clip and see which strikes you more favorably. That's all. About ten seconds on each if you wouldn't mind. I'm just wondering if I should change things up a bit and the open might be the 'a bit'.

Thanks. And if you ever need 20 seconds of my time, you got it. I'll even double it to show my appreciation.
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ricevoice · Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 2:49 pm Post subject:

Tough call... the football open is great and grabs your ear, but the original opener strikes me as being more mainstream/marketable, it may have broader appeal. That said, I can't imagine anyone hitting "stop" on the football opener... unless it was to grab the phone to book you.
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Frank F · Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 3:00 pm Post subject:

What Chris said +1.

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Mike Harrison · Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 3:28 pm Post subject:

I can't exactly say why, Rick, but the original definitely had more impact on me. And, great work, by the way.
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DougVox · Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 4:44 pm Post subject:

What Chris said.

And Frank.

And Mike.

Damn good stuff all around.
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Scott Pollak · Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 4:46 pm Post subject:

Ditto.

And ditto.

And plus 1. Plus another one. And one more. I think.
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Bruce · Posted: Wed Oct 01, 2014 4:33 am Post subject:

Both opening cuts are great of course. The first one has a big energy drop from the first to the second cut which felt odd to me, so I'd lean toward the newer version.

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juliaknippen · Club 300 Joined: 25 Nov 2012 Posts: 348 Location: NYC

I like the original one, hands down. The first clip in the original is just an excellent few seconds of acting.
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Rick Riley · Posted: Wed Oct 01, 2014 7:13 am Post subject:

Thanks all, for listening and the nice comments. So far, seems to be leaning towards the one I'm using now.

The reason I'm asking is because the football opening lives on the street where I get a lot of work. Hence, put it out front. But the original, IMO fits better. In the demo I tried to tell a little story, however it might be so subtle that it's lost. The first clip says, 'When seconds count it's the hours spent over the details that mater', which goes into, 'So as engine manufacturers began...' which goes into, 'But then one day someone told you to try the Porterhouse...' into 'nothing like this, the Platinum selling release from Rascal Flats...' into ' With unlimited and nationwide calling, they get tons of calling features' and so on. I have a feeling that was my own little game, that's probably gone pretty much unnoticed. Even as I explain it, it sounds kind of 'out there'.

Regardless, survey seems to say things should stay status quo.

Thanks again. If you need anything, call on me. Either here or via email, rick@rickrileyvoice.com

Your time was greatly appreciated!!!
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todd ellis · Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2014 6:58 am Post subject:

if i have to choose, i like the newer - but i couldn't stop listening to either one.
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yarg28 · Posted: Fri Oct 03, 2014 1:24 pm Post subject:

The first one. But I have to say, I had to listen to them both a few times to circle back to it because the football spot is pretty bad a$$. It reminds me of Peter Cullen.

I don't think either would be a mistake.

Eddie Eagle · M&M Joined: 23 Apr 2008 Posts: 2393

Football is your wheelhouse. I'd use it the most and keep #1 for specific clients.

melissa eX · Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 9:36 am Post subject:

It IS a tough call. They're both fantastic and at first I immediately went for the original but after listening a few times I changed my mind. Here's why,

The original is - to me - more attention grabbing, but it's the first few seconds of the PRODUCTION that grab my attention most - they make me want to LISTEN UP! But I'm listening to the production and you're one of the production elements all of which are awesome - so YOU don't make a larger impact than the music. So it's up to the second spot to really hear you.

The second version I hear YOU right out of the gate - with the production supporting you. I didn't even know it was sports until you said gridiron and by then I was totally hooked. So for me, the second wins - by a nose.

Diane Maggipinto · Posted: Wed Oct 08, 2014 1:27 pm Post subject:

I like the second intro, as it has less wait time (as eX said) and there's less music, it catapults your sound (voice) and gets down to business.
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